Where Theo started
Where Theo finished
Top public high schoolHard to stand out among his peers
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Clear business personaFuture leader in business or public policy
Personal statement off targetDraft did not show his interest in business
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Essay about his companyCentered on why he started it
Extra detail in draftsDetails took focus from his writing
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Focused on his storyBusiness interest shown clearly and personally
Broad 'Why Penn' answerNeeded details specific to the program
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Specific to WhartonAdmitted Early Decision